All Comments on 'Mind Control Madness Ch. 01'

Anon 1, there is absolutely nothing funny about a brain hemorrhage. My first wife had one and it was excruciating for all us to watch her go through that. By the grace of God, she recovered.

As to the story, you know it's fiction, right? He made it up. There is no mind control. And if you're going to comment, try not to do so in a long rambling sentence with no sense of grammar. I found it a decent little story. Short, and needs a bit more buildup, but not bad. Now he needs to entice women into most men's dream: HLA. I'll be back for more.

It was far too short and there wasn't much character development. I would like to see longer parts and more personality.