All Comments on 'Minder's Bureau Ch. 02: Med Exam'

I love it. Very interesting plot and want to know more about the Minder’s Bureau.

amazing, cant wait till he runs into Maeve again.

Or Jenn really gets her frustrations out on him

The machine seems like a cop-out. Because it's a mystery to you, you leave the reader in the dark. It reads better if this, that, and the other thing were done by the Med. Tech. I was also distracted by where all the mess was going. All that scrubbing and sloshing with one basin?

Work to get all the writing on the page. Let us see and feel what you experience in this piece. Watch what Casey can and can't see.

I can't wait for the next chapter.

Can we eventually get a chapter about the collared ones?

Outstanding story! You have good writing skills and your stories flow nicely. A pleasure to read. Please continue this series. I look forward to reading more of your work. Lil' ricky

A great set-up for an entire saga - I'll be watching with interest!

I found this to be disgusting and stupid. Why would I want to waste time on trying to correct someone who obviously doesn't want to be there? This is a joke of a story and not interesting.