by Pablocruz713
From my point of view many details are missing, both exhibitionism and sex scenes sound...emotionless.
You should describe how Miranda feels while she exposes herself, if she feels horny, if her pussy gets wet etc. same thing for the sex scenes.
This is another story that isn't too bad but needs to be less about being the same as a porno movie 15 minutes into the story and she's getting fingered and the next day Fucking everyone. Try and learn about spelling and grammar, it's tiresome that every story I read has poor spelling and grammar.