All Comments on 'Miriam's Fall'

Well, where is the discussion? The story is unfinished? 3 stars for the writing.

??? LoL! I think?

Not sure this is a loving wives story, but I AM sure that the husband would have had a lot of questions. It didn't seem like a good stopping point and you did not indicate that there would be chapter two. This was very short for a chapter. And the husband acted and reacted like he was 12 years old to the emergency. Poorly ended.

For her husband not to know, to not have any inkling at all, that his wife has been using a giant dildo on her pussy... means he has no real understanding of her. Has he never questioned how her pussy felt when they "made love". Is he so stupid as to not have any idea about what her sexual fantasies were and wether she acted on them? Obviously she has been having an emotional affair with another woman. One her husband has never met nor seen nor knew anything about.

The story has no real explanatory start and certainly no finish. Dickhead husband doesn't even ask his wife anything about what took place.

Great story, although I'm not sure why it was so important to hide away all the sex toys. I have the impression that EMT's are quite professional and discreet. They must see amazing things all the time. Still, the story is quasi believable and I found it enjoyable to read. 5* from me, JBE

PS: I'm glad the head wound was not too serious.

Truly original and fun.

A very incomplete story. I know that this was supposed to be a short one, but still unsatisfactory. I will credit author with originality.

Incomplete

Has the makings of a story but it's not there yet.

Decent start of a story, but I couldn't give it a higher rating than average b/c the story didn't go anywhere. Some stories artfully leave a reader hanging about possibilities. This wasn't one of them. Seemed more like the beginning of a story.

FTDS

A good start for an interesting story... even though ot ended with a healthy dose of snark, this story could become the beginning of an interesting tale...

Give it some thought.

In the meantime, 4 stars for something I've not seen in LW before !

Hmm. Why does computer lady have his number?

I enjoyed the story, as the scene is quite unique. Volunteering, as an EMT, I had one call in which a man died at the moment of orgasm due to taking Viagra, while on heart medicine.

No kids.

Empty nest.

Big black dildo.

Anal beads.

Red flag waving...

I think it won't be long till she's going to try the real BBC.

Good thing the writer ended it, or it might be another cuck and bull story...

Who wrote on her chest?

I’ll add to the chorus. It’s really not finished.

It feels like the intro to a good story cut short for a witty line.

FINISH IT!

Not at all plausible. His wife never let's him near her ass and here she is with a giant plug she put there herself? Obviously she doesn't care enough about him to include him in her life. Divorce is the only option here. Not this bullshit the author has spewed here.

Reading explanations into the context of what's written leads one to believe there's one hell of an interesting story left to tell. And I must say that it's refreshing to anticipate that story without unduly stressing that it's a humiliating 'cuck" tale--although the descriptions of the dildo and anal beads as "huge and black" gives one pause regarding the ubiquitous harping of "superior black cocks in racist versions of cuckoldry. Hope not. A bisexual tryst would be nice, or perhaps just a wonderfully sexual indulgence by a "wife of a certain age".

Enjoyed it. Take it where you will, and thanks.

MLJ

Where's the actual story?

This guys a fucking idiot! Once he saw what the slut was up to, it wouldn't be hard, why would he even talk to the cunt on the monitor, except to find out who she is. I know the last line was supposed to be funny cute, but his response should have been, "well explain in to my lawyer when your headache is gone."

There are a lot of problems here. There are overarching problems such as it feeling incomplete and unrealistic. Then there are minor details, such as turning off one monitor turning off the speakers and then having the speakers still on for the call on the other monitor. Then there's the fact that the incident report would list the location of the fall as the home office, so the doctor would know she wasn't in the tub. Not to mention that EMTs aren't stupid and would figure things out from her being naked at the computer while smelling of sex lube, not to mention having to avoid the slick puddle of lube on the floor. It's kind of their job to recognize situations as they triage the patient in order to make the correct care decisions.

Haha fun story

He never asks the woman "Who the fuck are you?"

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Why should he care what happens to Miriam?

Rated a 1! Not finished and the wimp husband had no idea what to do. Why not just let the paramedics inside and discover all the toys and let the chips fall where they mat?

Not finished.

Sounds like the discussion needs to happen.

Thank you.

Absolutely not the way to end a story.

Loving wives section and the poisonous comments are not my cup of tea but I love your writing and your imagination 5*

Worst way to end the story. Really disappointed.

Silly.

meh. unfinished train wreck.

Ha ha, humour before the rumours.

Excellent, ignore the anon

Simply hilarious! 5 stars

Dif'rent!

Everyone has a hobby. His wife likes dildos and anal beads. Needs to watch out for dangerous lube spills. Definitely a HAZMAT. Lucy got some splainin’ to do

NOW there a chapter 2, but why no indication here that this is a chapter one? I agree that I wouldn't bother trying to protect her reputation or modesty,