All Comments on 'Model Stepsister Ch. 05 - The Beach'

You lost me when you switched to third-person. It had been a really good series until now. If there are any future tales to be told, please let Kyle tell them himself.

Holy shit, I didn't even realize I did that, my bad. I think I got mixed up in chapter 4 when it follows Jessica without Kyle for a little bit, and then I didn't switch back in chapter 5. Chapter 6 is already mostly written, and it's in the third person, but I'll see if I can switch it back without fucking up the chapter. Thanks for pointing that out, I literally didn't even notice.

Good job, thanks for sharing your work!