All Comments on 'Moot Point - Gentlemen's Club'

Woopsie...

This is a terrible serious. Not clever or insightful. Lazy writing.

self-inflicted punishment, good one. I had an Arnie in my life, the best thing I ever did was to get rid of him.

Fuck that

to much thinking

Great story!!!! Could you please write an epilogue....? .... ;)

Maybe Arnie has an "accident" and divorce for irreconcilable differences follows.

Needs an ending that unwinds multiple paragraphs of wondering who did what to who...

Complicated. Interesting twists. 5* for that. Thanks.

Very first sentence...

...Is effed up. Geez.

A couple of real asshole.

Finish it!

"Can we have some butter too? If there's left some?"

If there's left some? Shouldn't it be 'If there's some left?" Seriously, first sentence and I didn't read futher. Shows lazy writing and lack of editing.

OOAA, thanks for the comment.

That's a good idea, I may write epilogues for some of those Moot Point series stories.

Of course, if I can learn what really happened :))

"This is a terrible serious. Not clever or insightful. Lazy writing"

But the purpose of the series is that. It's about the individual's mood changes depending on unclear events.

It's not supposed to be clever (not my intention).

Lazy? I can agree that I should have read it a second time before posting, because I found some errors which I missed in my review.

Thanks for the comment.

"I had an Arnie in my life, the best thing I ever did was to get rid of him."

Cheers on that.

But Todd is not very innocent too, right?

"If there's left some? Shouldn't it be 'If there's some left?"

I get what you mean. I also don't think dialogues should be pristine, perfect. But you're the second person complaining about it, so, in first revision I'll change it. I'd prefer "If there's any left."

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"I didn't read futher. Shows lazy writing and lack of editing."

Not for that sentence but I found other errors as well, so, I have to agree.

Thanks...

So the gist is Arnie is screwing both wives and cuckolding Todd - i guess it could have been written much better and actually been finished as a story.

"i guess it could have been written much better and actually been finished as a story."

Probably.

But there are thousands of those finished ones and I think these are fine the way they are.

At least for now, especially for this series.

26thNC, nice to see you still follow all my stories, with your lovely comments...

Incomplete

Not incomplete, just as how it was described in the first paragraph.

Scribbling interruptus as quintessence for moot points reflecting the authors impotence.

I feel your pain.

Mazerf Akar

Mazerf, nice try.

We both know I don't feel pain.

We both know who scribbled this pathetic comment, reflecting his impotence.

The pain you're feeling is not mine, go talk to someone who cares.

I have to agree incomplete.

"I have to agree incomplete."

Ok, I'm guessing you are the reader who said (he?she?) was done, because I don't finish the stories (in Carol comments).

According to me, these are finished. The story is not about how they cope with life after this crisis or unpleasant episode, this is only about the troubled period and the trouble itself.