All Comments on 'Motel'

and in second person. You wonder how this is all happening right now and who is referring to you as 'you'. It's all so strange.

Or is the Second person Dweeb. I really feel sorry for the writers of tomorrow.

Nobody will be able to read what they write, let alone enjoy the journey the supposed writer is trying to take them on. Why can't you fools get it into your thick heads that like everything, there are rules to follow if you want to do anything half way well enough to get by. Most take driving lessons before they start driving, they learn the road rules so they know what to expect from other road users. What makes writing any different, please take an English course before you make a fool of yourself and then put it up on the net for everyone to judge you.

Then, next to the comment block, I see that this is a series? Who cares? I just increased the number of comments on this drek by 50%!

Ugh, wrong category, bad story, poor writing...

I'll will not comment the wrting...but only the plot...Well, there was no plot, just two animals fucking...1*

Just a couple of people rutting. Not interesting or entertaining.

It really doesn't work for this tale. I didn't meet you earlier and I sure as hell don't wait around naked for you.

I couldn't read the story because of the 2nd person. 1* FAIL

obscures the plot and frustrates the reader. Sorry, this story failed in a big way.

This belongs somewhere else, like up your ass.

Enough said.

Better yet get rid of the asshole who wrote this piece of shit.

you're a disgrace to man kind. Only a fag would do what you do every day!! Gave it a 5------ 3 times! Eat shit annony

You are ashamed to have written this POS. You resolve never to repeat this mistake. You suck, sir.

Only a loser UnCel would write this crap.

Only a loser InCel would write such pathetic crap