by miguel_casanova
What in the absolute fuck is this bullshit?
Did you have a lobotomy while writing this drek? We’re you drunk? I mean really! In the space of 15 minutes he controls everyone and not one goddamn person says “stop”?
This was about as erotic as watching paint dry.
An ir piece of shit start to finish. Even Buster would be embarrassed to write this.
""One of these days I arrived home"" .... This is not how one of these days is used. It would be correct to say: ' one day I arrived home'.
Dialogue, this reads like a story from a 4th grader. Difficult to follow and not very sexy, at all.
I hope you write another chapter detailing a weekend with hust Carla and Miguel. Where he introduces Mrs. Dominate at home to a truly different shared sub life.
Loking forward to reading at least one more Carla experience.