All Comments on 'Movie Night with GF's Sister'

More chapters are encouraged!

I cant wair for more 👏

Hoping for more...

Editing would help.

Please get a proof reader. Numerous spelling issues.

Great story but need spellcheck

More chapters but badly needs an editor

The story was good, but as many others said, you need an editor. You showed evidence of being intelligent with some of the vocabulary, but then would use collage and college in back to back sentences (twice), and other things like that.

I meant it when I said your story was good, now make it a better experience for the reader and it will soar.

The story was great, but the delivery was a little flawed. A proofreader or an editor would help to enhance the overall package.

Soo he cheated on his girlfriend and they are talking about getting married right?

Spellcheck is not an editor. She's in "collage". They kissed with "tongs"? Come on.

I love a good “wife/girlfriend’s sister” story. It’s taboo and fucked up and naughty. Would personally appreciate a little more dirty talk and situational awareness to increase the taboo factor.

Also be mindful of typos. It’s hard when you’re excited by the very story you’re writing, but it will help polish it up! Good work.

I think the author should read the story and make spelling corrections before submitting.

Your spelling is terrible, you jump from girlfriend to wife and back to girlfriend in the space of a few sentences. It’s really bad.

Good story! But just a couple of issues. You need to look up the definition of incest, this is not incest (at least not yet). You definitely had numerous spelling, punctuation and grammar errors in the story. Other than that, it was good, really good. Please continue, you can only improve and I'd love to read where this is going.

A serious grammar and spell .check is needed

Great start. I really enjoyed it.

As others have mentioned , finding someone to proofread it will help immensely.

Would love a part 2!

I'm guessing he. Is not as into his girlfriend as he stated at the beginning. Way too many Grammer errors. Is he considering what long term results will be? Is she? Does either care.

I find humor in some of the “issues” other readers are distracted by. To some, the male protagonist’s dedication to his girlfriend is vital to the story. Also, the actual category is “Incest/Tabo.” I think a sexual encounter with your girlfriend’s sister is taboo and qualifies. If your girlfriend or wife has a hot sister, that is not something I recommend discussing with either of them.

I agree; spelling and grammar need improving to make the story easier to read. Both are detrimental to your story and reduce readability and enjoyment.

Definatly need to learn how to spell

The body part is spelled "waist"; the stuff that comes out of the butt is spelled "waste"

Good story.

Get an editor. It’s tongue not tong.

Cheating asshole + Stupid slut = Popular? The fuck is wrong with you people.