All Comments on 'Muscle Control'

He is not going to accept abuse from a woman he never met

I enjoyed the story, but was sometimes confused as to the "point of view". First person narrative switched back and forth between parties so it was hard to tell who was saying or thinking. Also third person and first person narratives shouldn't be intermingled. But keep writing. I'll keep reading!

Nice story, but the abrupt changes in the point of view were distracting. J.

I rose to my feet and asked permission to shower before going out for dinner.

“Yes, of course. Go now”.

I shaved, showered, dried put my cock cage on, put on a freshly laundered shirt and my new suit, loafers with no socks.

I went into the kitchen, found the cleaver and returned to the living room where Jane sat on her armchair. She looked up, a look of anger, then shock sprang to her eyes.

I swung the cleaver with all my might. “Bitch” I muttered.