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All Comments on 'My Alpha Mate Ch. 01'

by E5450

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AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

amazing start. PLEASE PLEASE keep going with it

AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

meh

AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

It's difficult to tell if the dialogue is thought or spoken, italics are usually used for unspoken conversations. Since you use italics when she's "thinking" and when she's talking to others, they distract from your writing. Knock it off :)

AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

An interesting beginning. Please continue.

MbC56MbC56almost 2 years ago

Next chapter please!

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