All Comments on 'My Brother's Best Friend'

This was great!! Would love a part 2

Give sexy Callum a splash of sexy blond chest hair! He seems a mature guy who could have sexy chest hair and a treasure trail leading to his cock!

Not only is My Brother's Best Friend a wonderful romance story, it is amazingly the very first submitted by the author. It is certainly a story that needs to be continued. As it currently stands, it is far too short. Five stars.

Loved the story and would love to read part two as well.

There are so many unnecessary and unwarranted exclamation marks that it reminded me of my aunt's Facebook posts.

Screaming is a very distinct vocalization, not a catch-all for the varied sounds people make at loud volume during orgasm. Nobody's running around screaming all the time during sex. There are so many descriptive words that fit better than screaming.

The amount of squirting is overkill. When a woman is gushing like Niagara Falls, it's impossible for her partner to lap up every drop as costantly claimed nowadays. At some point a towel is required. These kinds of bad descriptions of squirting are what happens when the author has never had a WAP or squirted.

It's hilarious how everyone's eyes are constantly rolling to the back of their heads in erotica now, as if seizures during sex have become an epidemic. It's gotten to the point where I wonder if anyone using the phrase in their writing has had sex with another person in real life.

Overall, this story doesn't add anything new or exciting to the genre. It just recycles overused and unimaginative words and phrases in a clunky story littered with bad punctuation.

Yo, dial back on the exclamation points.

"as I began squirting across the room" When women's sex organs can be used in lieu of fire hoses. Wtf

Four of the first six sentences end with exclamation points. I couldn't read past that. Yikes.