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Good points. Chapter 5 is good as it is. And really, who cares about Rachel? She made her bed.

Props to the author for breaking the "Bully" story mode and letting the victim "Kevin" have his moment.

First of all, I want to say thank you for writing such a good story. It was compelling, erotic, emotional and kept me intrigued to see what happens next. And the biggest positive point of your story for me is the fact that you strayed away from the cliched and typical ending to most of the stories in this category where its mostly the son accepting being a cuckold.

So I liked that you made him get his revenge and come out of this ordeal stronger and better. And the way you planned the chapters and the progression was also quite splendid. In the first few chapters you established the bully and those themes which I also really appreciate and like reading about but then later you made Kevin strong and made him want to take his revenge. So we, the readers, got the best of both sides. The bully and cuckold themes in the first chapters, and then the revenge themes in the last ones.

So with that said, I wish you good luck on your next story and I hope it follows the trends and points of this one.

Fantastic! Well thought out and excellent! I do hope you continue writing these types of stories because your process and attitude is excellent! Thank you for the story!

Thank you for that explanation. I really did enjoy that you went down a different path with this story instead of the typical bully story. I know people were mad about it & said that's how these stories end. I think change is good & everyone likes something different every once in awhile. I have to say you did write an amazing character in Kevin & I think most people liked him. I feel that is why so many people wanted him to come out on top at the end. He was a very likable person & you just felt bad for him. As far as Rachel is concerned I think Kevin did the perfect revenge to her, just cut her out of his life & never looked back! Thanks again for a great story & explaining your thoughts. Not sure if I want to read about Rachel yet, kind of hate her!!

eagerly waiting for what is yet to come and hoping it would be great .

God, your bloviating blowhard explanation is even MORE boring than the long-winded story ... have you ever thought "brevity"..?

Appreciate you posting your thoughts on the chapters. Chapter 4 was honestly very disturbing to me, but also erotic and intense and heartbreaking. You are really talented. The one thing I’d love to see you expand on is what Rachel’s thoughts were, particularly after Kevin leaves. How does this impact her relationship w Marcus? Were her comments about Kevin to Marcus in chap. 4 just dirty talk to please Marcus, or did she mean them? How does she feel about that he situation in the final chapter?

You had comment that in the original chapter 5 Marcus blackmailed Rachel to keep having sex with him. Was just wondering what he was using to blackmail her. After all she already lost Kevin what could be worse than that. Just didn’t know what he would blackmail her with that could be worse than losing your son. Thanks!

Thank you for sharing your thoughts and perspectives. Always fun to see how a writer progresses and story and why :)

To answer the question about the blackmail, Marcus was going to have filmed the threesome with Davis. He would threaten to post that online and using Kevin's full first and last name in the title. If anyone searched Kevin's full name, the video of his mom with 2 black men would come up.

Damn I was so looking forward to Marcus knocking Rachel up with a black baby.

Oh so now all of a sudden she cares about hurting Kevin!! Little too late for that. Maybe she should of thought about that before she screwed Marcus & Davis . She knew he made films because he was sending her them.

After reading your notes, I absolutely agree that you shouldn't have used the alternate ending of part 5. I would've hated if that was done to Kevin and your story wouldn't stand out against all the other bully/cuckold/humiliation/revenge/blacked stories. I would've stopped reading and given all parts 1 star and probably left a nasty comment, lol.

I love this series because it's like an anti-cuckold + revenge series which is rather unique here. Instead of taking the abuse or worse, joining in, Kevin becomes a good man after giving everyone the just results for their actions. To quote 'V for Vendetta' "Good guys win, bad guys lose..."

Everything else in the notes I agree with as well. In particular I too disagree with the physical revenge route people wanted for Rachel. It's not needed (she should be suffering enough emotionally) and it takes away Kevin's moral high ground. He's possibly going to need enough therapy (if the revenge wasn't therapy enough lol) as it is and that incident would've destroyed him.

I eagerly await to read Rachel's side of the story most of all though. I think not having Rachel's side of the story makes this series feel somewhat empty or unfinished. That is the only criticism I really have of this series and I'm glad you're re-writing to include her side.

I please request that you be as detailed as you can be in Rachel's actions, thoughts and reasoning so the readers can understand the depths of her depravity and her fall.

I also request that we find out what ultimately happens to Rachel in the end of the series beyond "she went for psychological counseling". Does she spend her life trying to make up for it? Does she crash and burn? Does she just slowly fade away? Eager readers desire to know more!

Hopefully we readers get to see see that Rachel has a moment of clarity and realizes just how badly she's acted, just how badly she has destroyed her life and how badly she destroyed her relationship with her now ex-son and dishonored her late husband's memory.

I think most of us readers would agree that we want to see Rachel psychologically, socially and professionally suffer for her actions. I personally would not want her to ultimately justify her actions and beliefs and turn herself into some kind of hot milf slut that the town and/or young men enjoys and she enjoys being as this is just a coping mechanism for the damage she's caused.

Again, I started out hating this series but by the end I loved it. I eagerly look forward to any updates/revisions to the series. Good luck, AoS1666!

I have to say I enjoyed the first 4 chapters and didn't read the last 2. I don't care for Kevin's revenge. That's not why I read this type of stories.

You could have finished with chapter 4 because the way Kevin leaves is just great. He is brave enough to just leave the toxic environment and not give his mother another chance. It shows he isn't a weak ass pussy. He was bullied and couldn't change things because Marcus was too influential in school. He confronted his mother, gave her a chance and left when he had the power to. I though it was a great ending.

You could have made the last 2 chapters a new story or something like "my bully takes my mom: Kevin's revenge". That way you can also do a "my bully takes my mom: Rachel's story". Same universe but different spin-off.

I have to say I enjoyed the first 4 chapters and didn't read the last 2. I don't care for Kevin's revenge. That's not why I read this type of stories.

You could have finished with chapter 4 because the way Kevin leaves is just great. He is brave enough to just leave the toxic environment and not give his mother another chance. It shows he isn't a weak ass pussy. He was bullied and couldn't change things because Marcus was too influential in school. He confronted his mother, gave her a chance and left when he had the power to. I though it was a great ending.

You could have made the last 2 chapters a new story or something like "my bully takes my mom: Kevin's revenge". That way you can also do a "my bully takes my mom: Rachel's story". Same universe but different spin-off.

Ok first off thank you. I came to the realization that this is from Kevin perspective so when he was done that's it. I like that basically you describe marcus as a pusher man a drug dealer but the product is his penis. Rachel became an addict simple and fucked up. I do enjoy your work but yea I'm not reading her pov well I may look at the last page because it goes with the cannon story. Also yes I've envisioned the alternate story just like that. A truly fucked up end. However good job and it has a little realism along with the fantastical. The little needs a w every now and then. Besides the interracial love section needs some damn balance jesus so much fucking cuck shit.

I agree with you on no releasing the alt chapter 5. It would have been totally devastating for Kevin & where would he have gone from there. Exactly the things you said he would of never recovered from that! So glad you gave the little guy the big win! As far as Rachel’s POV who cares why she did what she did. I would like to see you write about her from chapter 4. How & why she broke her promises to Kevin. Why she picked Marcus over being a mother & honoring her late husband. I don’t care about anything before that personally I hate the woman! I would like to read the aftermath of Kevin burning the pictures & leaving her. How she reacts to the arrests, being questioned by the police & losing her son. Finally what happens after her stint in the hospital. Hopefully she ends up alone & realizes what a mistake she made. The whole town hates her & finally Cindy even dumps her!! Let her pay for the rest of her miserable life for what she did to her son!

Your are one of only a handful of authors that wirte extraordinary stories with a rational plot and on top of that still create great sex scenes, can't wait whats next to come!

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I really hope you keep writing! There are so many different directions and relationship dynamics to take betrayal and revenge in this context.

I like the direction you took with the story, though with all the buildup of how much Rachel was submitting and giving herself to Marcus, it felt like a bit of a letdown that their plotting never panned out... BUT, in recognition that the central thrust of the story was about Kevin's rise as opposed to Rachel's fall, it's still satisfying that he managed to gain confidence, independence, integrity, and revenge in spite of being betrayed by a woman that was supposed to love and care about him.

Great job man.

Please, the next story could be a rich mom with big fake tits who became poor and went to live in a black neighborhood, let's go friend

I think there should be a story where 2 couples whose marriage seem to falling apart find pleasure in cheating among themselves.....

Would love to read what happened in between chapters 3 and 4 .

P.S. to my previous post short of a month ago: Please keep us up-to-date on how things are going with this story and if/when we can expect the updates to this series.

I'm checking your account almost daily hoping for an update.

Good luck!

HooHaa77, sorry for no updates recently. I have been working on the Rachel story. I have a few pages done.

I hope to have something put up for reading in the next week or two.

@AoS1666: SWEET! Cant wait to read it! Keep up the great work and thanks for the quick reply!

Psh take your time! Some people forget this is a free site and we get to enjoy the work you choose to provide us. Thank you for everything and I appreciate it!

AoS1666 thank you very much for your work reading stories about bbc moms but I have not read a story yet where there is a mom with big fake tits who cheats on her son with several black men from her school my idea is a mom who is rich has fake boobs and They are very old and she and her son are ruined in poverty and they have to go live in a more humble neighborhood and the young blacks who study with their son and who live there want her that is my idea, hopefully one of these wonderful writers like you can please me thank you very much for your work and dedication

when will the Rachel story come out?

if we ask ourselves when will the story of raquel come out

I would love to read it from Rachel’s perspective

I am nearly done chapter 1 of Rachel's point of view. I hope to have that done and most of chapter 2 done by the end of the weekend.

Thanks for the update! Can't wait to read your new works!

Thank you very much for your story for answering us thank you for the lust that you produce in us hopefully there I miss the mom with big fake tits who likes gangbang bbc

Chapter 1 of the Rachel version has been submitted for publishing. Should be up in a few days.

Thank you so much

thanks for indulging and entertaining us thanks for taking the time to indulge our lust

having to explain that sack of shit son to the world only proves you took a fucked up plot line and followed it in the wrong direction.

The story line was original, erotic and completely different.

With that said; the lack of the physical and emotional impact on Mom

made the story not end with a zing.

Having seen what happens ( i know- which is another story) to a white milf engaged in an affair with a younger teenager inter-racially; and how she was changed and how she debased herself in an attempt to keep up the relationship in very demeaning way- well it does happen and its absence from the story made it lose it's pulse.

But- thanks for the excellent beginning! Please continue!

Remembering another bully and mom story- in literotica- just can't remember name-- blonde milf and ? but it perfectly and erotically describe the mum as she tried to resist the bully's advances but still was seduced.

I would like to see a subversion of this story, where a bully tries doing this, but gets cucked instead.

I finished reading your story over the weekend and I have to say it was one of the most intriguing reads I have ever experienced.

Apart from the grammatical and spelling mistakes (which has been mentioned several times by others) I did have a few comments:

When I started reading the story I thought it would go the way of many of the bully and mom stories that I usually read. How her son becomes a sissy/submissive cuckold to his own mother and decides to do nothing about the powerful Black Alpha Male taking over his mom. Honestly this is what I was hoping for and was anticipating. When he caught his mom cheating for the 3rd time riding Marcus on his late fathers chair and then ran off I was actually kind of annoyed to be honest. I actually wanted to see Kevin turn into a cuckold. It would have been amazing.

But surprisingly the way the story went after that piqued my interest..and I didn't lose any anticipation. In fact when Kevin started plotting his revenge I was actually rooting for him to go through with it.

It was a strange feeling that I was on one hand rooting for him to be a submissive cuckold and to just accept his fate because that's what makes it hot for me, but on the other hand I'm actually rooting for him to stand up for himself. I was dying to see how the whole revenge scheme would pan out and it didn't disappoint me at all.

I just had one question. Which is if Rachel/Mom really wanted to continue having her affair with Marcus (and Davis) why does she keep doing it at her house, where her son is 24/7?! Surely she could have just gone to a motel or whatever under the pretense of "buying groceries" or "meeting a client" and she wouldn't have gotten caught. But I guess I'm just being nitpicky. Sometimes, as an author you always want to make sure that the characters behave in a logical and rational manner but at the end of the day humans don't always behave in a logical manner ;)

Still would have been so HOT to see his hot mom get GANGBANGED by the entire basketball team of well-hung Black Guys lol

The fact that people in the comments were actually rooting for the son to be a submissive cuckold is not only disgusting it’s boring and soooo over done already. It’s nice to see a story that does something different for a change. Would have liked more suffering and consequences for Rachel though.

Thank you so much for the ending being Kevin getting revenge ...i was so tired of the other endings.

Cant wait for your other stories...

I'm on the fence about reading Rachel's side but i do love your writing

Haters fantasy a mom hurting her children really very badly just for pleasure.

And they get angry even when son protects himself.

Even monsters do not eat their children.

But in this kind of stories moms eat their own children.

And haters like that.........

This is against "all moral values" and "life" itself.

I am really sorry for haters

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so you're telling me that in the even after kevin walked out and everything that happened on the phone she still goes back to the asshole? glad you didn't go with that version.

To those who didn’t like the story - you guys are just like Marcus or Rachael or the 10 who got arrested I loved it

I am a mom and I’m into younger men and….. I love my son to core tbh but this story was so awesome. It’s justified. It isn’t like those cuck stories that are always fake leaving the reader in hurt and disgust.

As a women I could feel Rachael as well after her son left and feel pity for her but yes she deserved it. So my point is , it doesn’t matter how high your sex drive is, make your decisions wisely. Bonus is you’re hot you don’t need to hunt for men with packages , they’ll come to you.

Thankyou Mr author it was very well written and very well ended soon going to read Rachaels perspective. Don’t ever pay attention to haters

Single moms are recreational use only

Very interesting. I agree, there is a sameness to bully cuck storys that make them difficult to het into especially if they go on for more than one chapter.

I really loved this story and i am so incredible happy that Kevin is a hero at the end and not a victim this story gives me hope. You did everything right in every way this story could be. I mean i am turned on by this bully theme. But at the end i was a bit ashamed to get turned on by this cruel things the moms did to their sons. In the end of the stories the sons are broken. But not here and i fucking love it. Kevin is my personal hero now

I think the story should start with. Rachel an Marcus when Marcus come to see about

mowing the lawn at Rachel home . Before Marcus become a bullying to kevin .Plus Marcus

fall in love with Rachel