by dartee
A little roughly written but a very hot story. I think that you could have taken your time getting to this point and there could have been a lot of hot scenes leading up. I am looking forward to the next parts.
Thank you for writing and posting here.
Great start, but proof reading is needed. Spell check substitution problems but has great potential.
You have potential as a writer, but please find an editor for your next story. There were too many punctuation errors and run-on sentences to ignore, making it a difficult read.
Very hot story..definitely my type of cuckoldry where the woman totally understands that she’s in charge..hopefully he’ll soon experience the thrill of jerking off while watching an alpha cock penetrating her sexy cunt..then he cleans the bull’s cock..