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Click hereA few seconds passed before I received another message,
I sighed to myself and replied
I began my way back toward the bathrooms, weaving my way through the trees once again. I reached the beach where all the people seemed to be gathered. Barbecues sizzled and wafted smoke as rafts drifted in the water. I walked around the big wooden log building which seemed to be the bathroom. Sure enough, the girl's bathroom was right on the other side. I made sure nobody was looking before I peered into the room. The stalls were empty except for one. I spotted Kyla's recognizable orange bottoms around her ankles.
I strolled into the bathroom and walked over to an empty stall, scooping a fistful of toilet paper. I then walked over to Kyla's stall and knocked.
"Housekeeping!" I piped.
"Just give me the toilet paper, dummy," she said annoyedly. I obliged and cracked the stall open. Kyla had her legs closed and a hand over her eyes embarrassedly. I grinned as I handed her the paper.
"Clean up those manure fields, Farmer Brown."
"It was only number one!!" she cried and I laughed as the door swung shut.
I waited for a few seconds till I heard the toilet flush, Kyla opened the door and slapped her ass. The clap echoed in the tiny bathroom as she washed her hands at the sink. Kyla spun around and flashed her tits at me as she walked backwards through the exit. Cute.
We once again reach the car and got back in. Off we went, back home.
- COMMENTS
ScottishTexanabout 1 year agoMeh, it was just okay. Two things that are boring me to death because EVERYONE ELSE is doing it too. First is the girls shaving off their pubic hair. Why is everyone so hung up on this trope? I like my women to look like ADULT women. That means DO NOT SHAVE THE HAIR AND LOOK LIKE A PREPUBESCENT TEENAGER! I am not into child porn at all! Second is the slapping the ass and ass play in general. A little bit of that goes an AWFUL long way. You could have easily just had his recollection of the previous evening be the one and only ass play and not have his sister do him again in the living room with her ass. It would have been a better story that way.
Most of your prose was pretty good, but there was one instance that could have used a rewrite:
"I thrusted in and out of my sister, ..."
-Yeah, I am pretty sure that "thrusted" is not a word. This would have been easier to read if you had written, "I continued to thrust my dick in and out of my sister, ..." or some similar variant.
I also wasn't enjoying Jack and Kyla being just plain old fuck buddies either. I prefer love stories, personally. 3/5
OnlyJustToKnowMeabout 1 year agoAuthorCovid lockdown ended so I haven't really had time to write. Lockdown was the whole reason I wrote the first two chapters: to kill time. But yeah I didn't wanna leave the series unfinished so I did bits and pieces here and there, sorry it took so long. No idea where to go with this series now, to be honest. If people like it I might continue, but who knows?
CrankThzJackInDaBoxabout 1 year agodon't think i've did read something from franchise ...............
now that i've did saying that - what the fuck makes this chapter take over
three damned years doing . GEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE .
thanks explaining this bullshit
( WHAT MAKES EVEN WORSE )
pickup practically immediate whereabout previous stopped .
absolutely none kinda layover . completely none long term kinda break
