All Comments on 'My Trip to Yellowstone'

He needs to get together with both girls on a regular basis.

Omg if I only could join a situation, so steaming hot..

Very hot story with engaging narrative.

But ...

(Constructve Criticism follows)

You seem to have an aversion to using quotation marks and provide actual back-and-forth dialog between your characters.

Spoken word dialog helps engage the reader with the characters as people, not just descriptions on a page.

Also, your descriptions tend to run on and meander a bit. For the sex scenes that isn't necessarily a bad thing, but breaking up your descriptive paragraphs would make a stronger impact on the reader, just in my opinion.

By all means keep writing.

Very good and though no adventure lot of excitement and feel this could continue if not in story form in my mind and thought. Every mans dream fulfilled.