by Primus1
Excellent writing. I loved the way to created an image of your story. I was easily able to create a picture in my mind and you allowed the story to develop quickly without over-explaining. Cannot wait for more.
A wonderful little start. I enjoy how you drew her in and sprung the trap. I would have anticipated a bit more resistance and push back. I anticipated the next chapters wondering where this all leads.
A good story🌟🌟🌟🌟