All Comments on 'Nails'

Super cute. The lyrics fit well. I love the contrast between scene and aftercare. The alternation of now and then effectively balances the sex and non-sex, and you lined up the climaxes of the two arcs. This is a story I wish I had written.

Minor: some of the dialog was hard to follow because you have multiple people speaking in the same paragraph. Usually it's one speaker per paragraph. E.g., the paragraph starting "Come on, baby, you need to open it."

In general many paragraphs were very long. Splitting them up would make the story easier to read, both because they could reach be more focused and because my eyes just get lost trying to scab across that much solid text

I've been toying with in medias res but have never quite made it work well enough to publish. You've inspired me to try again.

I enjoyed your narrative very much! A quite well written, very arousing story. I really like the "Then and Now" dynamic.

Does Em like doing these things to men, by any chance? ;)

This was so hot, and you write wonderfully.

Thanks for sharing ❤️

Thank you everyone <3 Really, it means a lot!

@ouchfeelsgood sorry mate, but she and I are both very much hardcore dykes! but hey, it's a story, and it's your imagination. your emily can be whatever you want her to be!