All Comments on 'Naya in the Swimming Pool'

One of an author's first duties is to decide whether his main character is male or female. In the first three paragraphs of this story you used "he, him, she and her" to refer to Naya, almost randomly, and you repeated the error throughout the first page until I got disgusted and stopped reading. Your prose is dense and muddled, riddled with malapropisms and convinces me that you should stick with French for your writing. One star was a gift.