All Comments on 'Never Forget'

Interesting idea, but a hot mess of misspelled and misplaced words...

Story was good, I quite liked it overall and yet it was very difficult to follow with problems such as "find" where "found" should be. Sentence fragments such as the following were strewn in the path of the reader:

"Word on the street is that town celebrity Jaime Taylor who won State Championship for our softball team, got a full-ride scholarship to Michigan State," needs "would be there" to make sense.

Your story IS GOOD. Find a proofreader/editor and be amazed at how good you can be.

I fully agree with the previous comments. Very bad grammar, plus moving from present tense to past tense is very disconcerting. Also, Michigan State is in East Lansing. Just saying.