All Comments on 'Never Too Old'

It was a fun story, but what self-respecting lesbian would order a carafe of chardonnay? One should only decant red wine!

I loved it and so did my wife! She has had a number of bi-to-bi experiences and this story was both volcanic and fulfilling. The build-up was erotic and sensational and the details were inspiring and provocative. Reading this will cause us to delve into other stories you have written. Best of all ... after my wife experiences a wonderful bi or lesbian encounter, our sex life seems to click up a couple of notches. I'll be submitting the story of her fulfillment of sharing a lesbian experience in the next week or so. It was a desire she had for years and at age 68 finally experienced it ..... alone with her paramour in a motel room in NC for her only encounter with a real lesbian ... while I waited for morning next door .... giving them total privacy for a night of playing. She still gets wet just remembering it ... and she has relived it many, many times since!

I wonder if you are still around but that is by the by...

Please understand that this is purely constructive criticism but have you read this story? I am afraid I gave up about halfway down the first page - you appeared to be making all plot advances via your characters conversations. And what they said was so unbelieveable! What do you say to your partner just before orgasm? Maybe you gasp or pant or maybe you scream but you don't tell her you are cumming and use words like elixir! I asked my girlfriend what I did but just said I dribble and moan!

Read it through and ask yourslf if what each character is saying sounds believeable; would you say that to someone in the same circumstance? That is what I tell my third grade pupils when they write conversations.

Please don't take this as anything harsh since we need more lesbian erotica written by women for women and we can only learn from each other!

I shall put some of my stories up shortly, based on my own experiences (in the exhibitionist/lesbian/fetish areas, and maybe my true life incest tale if I can stomach putting something so intimate up to view) and you may review them, but that will have to wait for a spare afternoon.

Lexie

women are NEVER too old for sex unless there are circumstances. A woman who has taken care of her body and mind is an incredible lover in her 50's, 60's, and you mentioned 70. Most have yearned to remember the days having sex and become almost possessive

BRAVO to you

I am a man, but as I read this I began wishing that I was a woman who could give and receive this type of sexual pleasure described.

I shall think of this often and I thank the author for the fine wriiting and suspense of the story/

This comment is highly critical but is intended to be constructive criticism. I gave up on this story after a couple of pages because most of your dialogue was so stilted and completely unnatural that it rendered the story unreadable. A good example is on this page: "Cum into my mouth so that I may taste your feminine elixir of wanton bliss." Who the hell speaks like that, even in a story (and especially in the throes of sexual ecstasy)? I very much doubt that even Victorian pornography writers would have come up with something like that. If you had submitted this for a magazine or anthology, it would have been rejected so fast the envelope would have caught fire. And it's most unlikely that the editor would ever want to look at your work again. In real life, people just would not speak this way. In a good story the dialogue should sound completely natural. When you write dialogue, read it out aloud to yourself---if it doesn't sound natural and right, then keep rewriting until it does.

Wow, so hot! I wish I got an invite to that party. ;)