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by Veroticagirl

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AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

What? No. Just no.

AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

I would like to see the tension build more before your characters "meet". elevator, stairs, or something that doesn't make the dude seem like an ass clown for entering while a women showering. It is super hot once it is rolling, it was jolting to think of a random dude entering without some type of hint of invitation. Keep writing, fun stuff.

VeroticagirlVeroticagirlover 1 year agoAuthor

Fantasy my luv!

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Not here to get involved with anyone, so please, no messages regarding that. I'm writing again, so I would like some honest feedback and help to be a good writer. My stories are mainly my fantasies that may or may not lead to a story. I would appreciate comments that would ma...