All Comments on 'Newlyweds Made to Turn to the Dark Side Ch. 01'

fucking great story hope we get more

Punctuation Punctuation for chrissakes...Plot is good but needs to be proof read.

It’s fun. Lighten up porn police!

Looking forward to her performances and sales!

Wonder how it will develop when some black guy drops his cock on the husbands lips wanting a blow job before fucking slave wife. That would be hot.

Great start to a fine story. I don’t have the markings but my husband and I both love BBC. Want to read more from you. Xoxoxoxo Annette ♠️♠️♠️💋💋

A great story which covers just about all of the bases, I hope you do another chapter with a similar length that covers Stevie's descent further (seem's like Valerie is already there lol).

That said, it could do with a good proof-read as the spelling, punctuation, and grammar made it difficult to read in places (e.g. re-reading a section to work out what was being said and by whom). Proof-reading is a nightmare I know, but I would suggest running it through a free-app like Grammarly to catch most of the errors; alternatively, find a good editor to assist.

That said, I have seen poorer SPAG in a number of other stories; I make the suggestion merely because I think the content of your story is excellent and would definitely, in my opinion, be able to get a higher reader rating (e.g. closer to 5) if it was easier to read.

Great story but as another person has said it needs better proof reading and a good editor would help. There were some spelling and grammar errors.