All Comments on 'Newlyweds' Nightmare'

You know Hollywood used to have a board to make sure that the bad guys got punished in the end. That might have made the story better, like if Amber got the gun and the robbers were punished. Keep writing and try an editor.

I was hoping the bride would plead for them to take her with them and for her to tell her husband how much she needed their cocks.

Was this written by an eleven year-old? Worst writing I've seen.

I think Sean should have taken Amber as a "Hostage"

Reads like a story outline and not a finished product. Good potential but needs developed.