All Comments on 'No Escape From My Mate'

please make it longer but i think it was great.

Hope the next chapter comes out soon.

I can see this is going to be a lot like a trend on here, lol

but it's a little to short

That's a good start, you could do with trying for a little longer chapters.<br/>

While people will request the next chapter soon, that is not a reason to rush. take the time you need.<br/>

I also suggest that you find yourself an editor to catch those little errors that you missed yourself.<br/>

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-ShadowedDreams

its a good start hope that you continue to write. looking forward to some development of your characters and longer stories.

interesting start i would like to read more

You could do with someone to edit what you've written as there are quite a few grammatical errors, but other than that, I'm interested to see where the story goes

I agree with the others, you have a promising story start here but need to refine it. An editor would help with your structure, dialog and grammer, which in turn would help you turn a promising story to a good story. Dont rush it and it will evolve naturally.

you started your story gloriously. Like a good and avid reader, i will only say whenever you make a time, whoever is your editor, whatever is the plot, readers will keep on reading your story as long as the emotion is there - nee

nice beginning i would like to read more.

I really liked the way the story seems to be going hope you update soon

hope that u continue to keep writting..

This is getting great I can't wait for more!!!!

please?

This is a great start on a good storyline. Like others have said take you time and let it flow. Also find a editor or seeing if even a couple of other authors will proofread and give some tips. There are several fabulous authors that write the same type with the wolf and pack form. Look them up and read some of their stories. A some of my favorites are JazCullen, ArtForm, Mokkelke, and Wolf_girl13 to name a few.

I love this story and where it is going. Please don't keep us waiting for more.

Good start. Look forward to more but would like it to be longer.

Great story, plz keep it up

Keep it coming.

Especially in selecting just one tense and sticking to it. Your switch from present tense to past tense to future tense and back, sometimes in the same sentence or paragraph makes the flow of the story stilted and disjointed. Aside from my qualms about this though, I think you have a good story in the works here and I'm interested in reading more of it to see where it goes. Good luck in your writing!

I agree, like the others say, it sounds like a great story in the making... but the need for editing makes it disjointed and keeps the reader from getting into it.

I think you have to bones for a good story, you just need to flesh it out a bit more. Also like many of the other comments, you need an editor to help you out a little. Keep going though like I said, it's a good start.

Hey Doll-

Liked your start.....it is pretty decent. You just need an editor and to refine. This has lots of potential and I hope you will be inspired to develop it completely. This is my second time through...so I am hopeful for progress in 2012.

Season's best to you.

I'm a bit iffy on this start.. seems kind of off