All Comments on 'Old Friends - New Lovers'

Great short story.

Short

Sweet

Wonderful

sweeeet

This is like the outline of a story, sweet, but lacking depth, or any insight, or reason to care about these girls. I'd love it if you could write it again, but from the viewpoint of one (or even both) of the girls. Add doubt, hesitation, and then confirmation of their affection. Friends to Lovers is such a compelling narrative, and I think you have the chops to pull it off. Pick one character, turn all of the "theys" to "she" (they lump the two different characters together, and give us no tension, which is what drives most good storytelling, and see how it might fill out. I'm off to happily browse some of your other pieces. Keep writing. And thanks for sharing it.

@SeaReader - Thank you so much. I appreciate your comment. Indeed, it was a rushed short story as it was about some people that I had met, and their story hit a spot with me. I will ply them with some good wine and get them to tell me more about themselves and see where it leads.

Thank you for your compliments.