All Comments on 'Olivia: The Hottest Mom Ch. 16'

Excellent story. I converted it to audio, and it was over 12 hours long. Again, very well done. Thank you.

Scottie: you're a very good writer, careful with your typos and syntax and easy to read.

So we come to the end of this story, about a year after you started it. I thought the early chapters were the best, all about Cody and Liv. But as time went on, you seemed to get a bit lost in trying to incorporate wrinkles into the plot and then trying to finish it.

The first natural ending possibility was when she left California. You could have tied it up neatly then, and have both move on. Hs move to Chicago was a bit contrived, but this is fiction, so that's OK. The next natural ending point was after Liv's had the heart attack and Cody's started fucking Carla. It would have been easy to have those two move back to CA with Liv's approval. After that, things got a bit weird. The idea that the two women alone will decide who gets Cody, without his input, is out there, but this is fiction...

Things that added nothing to the story line were the trips to South Carolina and the clothing-optional resort, and the dalliances with Yv. The happy-clappy family ending was also really not needed.

Overall, I was eagerly following this story, so I'd like to thank you for the work and hope my comments are just an encouragement to keep things tighter for your next work, to which I look forward. All the best!

I enjoyed this story a lot. I thought you were heading to mother daughter threesome which would have been interesting but finishing it the way you did was just fine

Exceptional what a neat story! Brilliant group of characters and interesting plot. Thanks for writing this story.

Seriously, sometimes I hate the fact that this site is from America and almost all of the authors are Americans, stuck to the one wife law.

I loved this story. You brought the characters to life especially Cody. I remember being a young 18 year old and I would have jumped at the chance to learn from an experienced older woman. I thought the ending was great. Keep it up you write great stories.

The story was great until you started the threesome with YV and Carla then the story went down hill. It was also a little disappointing that Liv ended her affair with Cody so he could marry Carla. I think that Liv and Carla along with Cody could have had the best of both worlds by staying together and Cody Marrying both Liv and Carla.

Does jack codys best friend know he screws his partner and what he did with his mother? I have never liked romance stories like these where a so called friend in the name of love has sex with a best friends mom,sister and partner and still at the end of the story be considered a good person or likeable at all. I loathe almost all the characters in this series and am unable to like this story due to that factor of betrayel. I can never forgive betrayel not in the circumstances it is shown in this series only if their is mental or physical torture involved by one of the partner can i tolerate betrayel but not here sorry 1 star from me.