All Comments on 'On Camera'

A good erotic snippet. More, and longer with more background please.

BTW, 'they're' means 'they are' it does not mean 'their'

What a great story, loved it

for a rather good story. As a fellow author I suspect you ruffled someone's touchy feathers and they set about lowering your overall score. It's happened to me. Now as to the story itself, I liked your approach from the female perspective. Especially how you kept returning to her thinking of the 'boy's watching, or that would be watching.

Give any thought to returning to her say six months to a year later to see where she's gotten too?

PS: Like your other material (haven't read it all, but what I have, rates a 5 score.

Paris Waterman

Further chapters please, loved it!