All Comments on 'On the Road Again'

Yeah. Sorry I wasted my time on this.

"As they pulled into the park entrance "

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I took one look at that "paragraph", thought, "uh uh", and gave it a 1.

Really Really needs an editor to liberally sprinkle punctuation throughout.

Sentences so long that they become even unreadable.

The concepts are goodand, with assistance, this can become FANTASTIC.

I did ratevthisvav4, despite the lack of punctuation.