All Comments on 'Once Upon a Great Notion'

Lovely!!! Your stories are always fantastic!! This is a little different than your usual, but still great!!

I thoroughly enjoyed it. That was a great romp through the beginnings of learning to suck brother's cock. I hope you'll continue the story with Steve turning around and going back. Your MC states she's 48 now, so if she's the cum loving girl she says she is, that's about 30 years of being a cum dump. You could continue this story for a while.

The trick, and you've mastered it with this story, is to write a story, with wicked hot monkey sex inserted. So many think only of sex scenes, and then try to fit a story around them. And some think just writing fuck, cum, cock, pussy, jizz, cunt, is a story. That's a whole other topic.

As to comments, I can think of something. Now you can take it or leave it, and i wont be offended, just as i hope you're not. But at some point, she should learn to eat pussy. Maybe Steve learns to bang his sister, or already has, and she's seduced into that. Maybe a female professor seduces her. Maybe she joins a sorority and is seduced into eating tons of pussy. Maybe she learns of other incestuous loving people and is seduced by a woman there. Or maybe she has a cousin or aunt who seduces her, and after eating their pussy, she learns there's a reason dear old mom was so prudent; she too was a cum loving, snatch eating slut. Just make her as reticent about eating pussy as she was eager about sucking cock. Until she gets her feet (and face) wet, then she's all in.

Anyway, a myriad of possibilities. Whatever you do, I just hope you continue the story. Five big well deserved stars. Just wish I could give more.

Dewey Cheatham

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Loved it!! Wish I had a sister like you 😘

Meh, super slut sister story, not much of an incest story.

I Loved the way this story evolved.

A wonderful coming-of-age story. The early sections--in which Cassie has her first fellatio, her first orgasms, and her first erotic contact with brother Bobby--are sweet. Then Cassie gets into progressively more advanced and kinkier sex, including incestuous sloppy seconds. The climax, bukkake at the Rugby House, is wonderfully kinky and perverted: the sort of depraved scene that no one else does as well as Cindy'sBob. Yet the narrator's progression from near-innocence to near-total depravity seems plausible enough. Best of all, the whole tale retains a sex-positive attitude, no matter how kinky the sex; and the main characters love, accept, and respect each other all the way through.

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One very small niggle: the story doesn't seem quite sure of the *non-sexual* tasks of an academic advisor to first-year college students. But that's a pretty small point. An enthusiastic 5* and a Favorite for this story.