All Comments on 'Otherside'

Fun! Unique! 5 stars.

You asked for some feedback on the forum:

- I did find the transitions from third to second person jarring.

- The intro where you "slip into" something twice in two sentences was a confusing read. I wasn't sure if the intention was that you were only wearing the panties or not. Had to re-read it.

Loved the imagery of you cumming on the glass between the two of you.

Thanks! I wrote this as a collaboration with somebody I had a few hot minutes with on fetlife and in that sense it was kind of a conversation and maybe more personal than for public consumption. I've done that slip between persons in my other story Souvenir too. I do kind of like the conversational rather than expositional way of storytelling although I can see how it might be confusing for a reader coming to it cold.

I like the way you're writing. Very different from most here (me among them). It took me some time to get used to it, but then I really got pulled into the story. Well done and hot.