All Comments on 'Our Family Pt. 07'

by UncleWayne

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goducks111goducks111almost 5 years ago
well - the story

which i liked all the way and gave 5 stars - may have run its course. this was short, kinda formulaic.

centauri4centauri4almost 5 years ago
The pacing of this story was to much like golf!

Putt one in this hole, drive one in that hole, use a different size iron, then... uht, oh, watch out for the water hazard! So, you know, it would be better with some TENSION, UNCERTAINTY (will she or won't he...) and suspenseful DRAMA. These are the elements I see as lacking but, in the authors favor this is a story one can skim over and be finished reading in MUCH less time!

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