All Comments on 'Our First Foursome'

Will you please first make sure you understand the basics of English grammar before trying to write a story?

But while your theme was a HOT one you really didn't do a very good writing job.

I got confused early on and also didn't find the characters believable.

Divorce in three years or less. Good job throwing it away for some short term lust. Couldn’t happen to a more pathetic couple.