All Comments on 'Our First MMF'

It's no wonder she prefers other cocks if your love making is just as good as your writing skills!

Semi-Literate Drivel

From a mindless author.

I am always amazed at the small people who read these stories but dis the author for writing about what they really like wising they had a wife like yours. Keep writing!

Quit while you're a head. A dick head.

Nice story but appallingly bad writing. Try some punctuation next time

Title says it all.

This is beyond satire.

No need to continue to tell the others adventures!!! 1*

for story title and for wannabe authors name

Horrible

As someone else said "no further adventures needed"

Which basically means you'll only continue your own story if people kiss your ass, that you don't have faith in your own story.

Hey guys, be nice! I just checked and this was written by a first timer. A virgin. Let's encourage him and not just fuck him in the ass about his story. I will admit that it was not very good, but that's pretty par for the course as far as first stories go.

A little advice goes a long way. Re-read your story, CRITICALLY. That's hard to do when the story is in your mind and is struggling to get out. But that's exactly why you have to step back from it. Get someone else to read and critique it. I said CRITIQUE, not criticize. Big difference. Find someone who can be an editor to help you clean up the language, usage and spelling. Getting the story out of your head and into written form is the easy part. Working it up into something presentable is hard work. And finally, try again. Don't let the negative anonymous weenies scare you off.

basic premises is that all husbands have tiny dicks, cum in 30 secs, don't know foreplay from Eve, and cant fuck for beans

so you punched most of the buttons, and turn the husband into a useless desk ornament, so good job

Story is OK by me. Not well written. If you write more, get an editor.

There's plenty of this kind of crap on this site, and it a lot better written crap. So please stop now.

The story is not well written, but the key elements for a hot scene are there. I agree with the other comments that the writing itself needs review for grammar and flow... Stop when you're done and put it away a day or so, or find someone to help you wordsmith it a bit.

Don't quit writing, though!

I enjoy hearing true stories and know yours are true.

I have looked over and over but so far can't find a single story written by Anonymous.

I applaud you for sharing your story with us.

What a bunch of douchebags knocking your story! Dude, your story gave me hardwood, so I'd say a big success. To all the anonymous pussies, go fuck yourselves and write us a story about the experience. LOL

....sooner or later she's gonna find passion with someone and you'll get pushed aside.

Time to grow up.

I liked this story. It is short, hot, & I enjoyed reading it. Just saw you have another story up also. I'm on my way over to read it now.

I've seen many pics of your hot wife on another site! Thanks for posting these stories to flesh out (so to speak) the story behind what I've seen! Keep posting more, please! I know that you have many stories to share!! And, so those who haven't yet seen her ... you should post a pic of her on your Biography page here!

THANKS!!

Oh well, you really can't change the fact you can't take care of the whore. Good luck, you need it. You must be the town joke.

My wife and I had been married for two years when we had our first threesome and have had about ten since, Our marriage has been great ( where not the talk of the town ). I used to own my own business and know a lot of people,some became very close friends of my wife and I. We have now been married fifty five wonderful years and our sex life never affected anything or anyone.

Oh! I know this is a true story. Just because you told me it was.