All Comments on 'Our First Time'

from the constant change of tenses. First it's present, then past, back to the present... enough already! Pick a tense and stay with it.

It ruined an otherwise good (I supose) concept.

Wonderful story of passion and chemistry, nicely tied together in an extremly sensuous story! Very arousing---I loved it!

Thanks Walking for the comments.

It was better than my first attempt!

I agree I have a major problem with Past tense etc.

I can't help it. I am trying to get it right.