All Comments on 'Our Secret Ch. 03: The Pool'

Outstanding!

Starting out with "I am" followed by a name, then to boot, instructing the readers where to find her stats. I don't believe I've ever seen any story, even on this site, start out so poorly. I could move past that.

Anybody who knows how to write fiction, knows that if you don't get their attention in the first paragraph, you've lost a reader. Not only did you not get my attention, you turned me off to anything you said after the first sentence.

A new high in pacing, kinkiness and naughtiness. I hope this is to continue

Excellent. I hope this continues. Would love for the mother to set it up he daughter to watch her and her husband

Absolutely one of the best series thus far which I have read. You are very talented.

Sure would like to read about son sucking dad while Jenny licks Amanda in the same room

nice, very hot, need some more, how about Kyles wife? I am sure she wants in on the fun. The only one thing i would say is jenn's masterbation alittle over the top to much, makes it alittle unbelieveable

waiting for the following chapters.

A great series. Lots of future possibilities. I wouldn't mind if down the road the family goes vacationing at Pine Forrest and gets invited to cocktails at the owner's home.

Amazing build! Can't wait for them to all wind up together.