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pkp033pkp0333 months ago

Mel šŸ”„šŸ”„

ScottishTexanScottishTexan2 months ago

Pretty good, but I think that this would work best from a first person point of view. Your use of point of view needs a lot of work since you didn't really stick to a single one throughout the entire chapter. 4/5

iwiwtiwiwt2 months agoAuthor

@pkp033 thanks for checking this one out!

@coolstrangeravenue thanks so much! I appreciate that :)

@scottishtexan I appreciate you taking the time to comment, but Iā€™m not really after feedback like that, so kindly refrain next time and save yourself the effort.

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On again, off again relationship with my keyboard. We're on again, for now. Very fond of trying to keep my works light and fun, and work to mix a little humor in with over-the-top depravations. I really, really LOVE feedback; please feel free to connect in whatever way you...

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