All Comments on 'Overtime'

Good premise.

Sex much too rushed. Starts too abruptly. Rushes ahead. Is over too soon.

Needed much more in the way of foreplay before his cock entered her pussy.

Needed some tension before his hands cupped her breasts. Perhaps some asking for permission.

Needed her directing/instructing him about how to touch/play with her.

Needed her playing with his cock outside his pants before getting at ot directly.

Four stars.

Good, more build up required.

Sexy story. In their rush to get naked and see each other without clothes, I didn't read that his shirt was removed. Inseams to be if he keeps his shirt on, it would then get in the way of their sexual connection. It would be better if mention were made of him (or her) removing his shirt, or opening his shirt to revel a manly hairy chest that she could press her impressive nipples against. Think about it. A man's chest can be an important part to getting "turned on" for sex!