All Comments on 'Pamela And The Wardclerk'

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AnonymousAnonymous5 months ago

Mmh lost …. Some good scenes, great interplay … aside from inconsistencies mentioned earlier … But where does the overall plot line lead to? Not really a conclusive climax ending …. Sadly the author seems to have given up improving with more practice …

ellyneiellyneiabout 16 years ago
i didnt do a vote, only comment rate

This story didnt match my sexual fantasies, so cant comment on hotness. Also why I didnt vote on it.

You switch between present tense and past tense a lot, makes it difficult to read. Recommend you keep a thorough eye on what is past and what is present in future.

AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago
nice

made me hot.

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