All Comments on 'Partner Games Ch. 02: Fair Play'

They need to find others willing to join them

But the marriages soon will be!

Yes, you hit it out of the park again! Loved it! This series needs to continue.

Not one of your best. Good luck with whatever you write next.

This part 2 was doomed as soon as Sue cheated and didn't confessed to her husband...In this part all three kept fooling the cheated husband...1*

I know its fiction, but this is just fantasy. The logical conclusion is for Sue to fuck over Jerry every opportunity she gets, with whomever floats her boat. Their marriages are now just what's left on a piece of paper. All the love, respect, trust, is going, going, . . .

From mutual swapping to cheating is a very short trip. You lost your story.

With all of the humiliation, deceit, trickeration, back stabbing, and mistrust these once nice, church going innocents will be.....

Wait....they just had mind blowing sex and want to do it again? Well how can this be? Very hot sex. Decent dialogue. Just damn good fun. All BBQs should unfold this way. Great story. I guess I missed the part where the divorce attorney showed up.

"My wife has been trying to expand our pallet as she puts it."

"Pallet" is a bed, or a platform, like the ones made of wood that cargo is stored on.

"Palette" is the board that an artist uses to mix paint colors. I think this is what you were referring to.

To techreader...

Out of 8000+ words on this chapter, it's not surprising that both I and the proofreader miss an occasional word. Happens even in professionally edited and published books.

M

So what, with 8,000 words? And then, you state, "it's not surprising that both I and the proofreader miss an occasional word."

It's more than an occasional word, it's also grammar. It's not surprising that both the proofreader and I miss an occasional word, is how it's supposed to read.

And again, the Brit habit: "the wife", "the wife", ad nauseam. Give the poor woman a name more often. Did someone teach that emphasizing, "the wife" increases erotic tension? Not to me it doesn't, it is highly annoying.

Somehow I missed this as being a “Swinging” story. But the first was so good, it brought me to this one. Great story. Don’t let the probs with editing or spelling/punctuation stop you. The story runs well in it’s sequencing and story line. If I could do as well I would be writing.

Thanks.

Definitely nope. It was all a setup from the first story so the wives could cheat on their husbands. The guys definitely need to divorce these conniving cheaters.

Damn ! I got myself another boner to deal with. The dialogue is so good, I feel like I'm with them watching and hearing everything. I see myself wanking away as both couples are going at it. Absolute entertainment and I hope you never stop writing. What else can I say ... voted you another five stars. Now heading for chapter 3 to find out what these two perverted couples are up to.

Wives rule, and make the rules

Never mind the negative commentary. While I also caught the mis-spelled 'pallet,' it didn't take anything away from the action. Five stars! Well done!

The story was a bit meh in places but the pacing is good. I laughed out loud when I got to this:

"Well. Kinda screwed that up," he said quietly as he climbed to his feet, picking up the vibrator he'd used on my wife and the towel.

I hope the towel felt as good as the wife…