All Comments on 'Passing in the Morning'

this POV choice is awful. Automatically, half of your potential readers are alienated by it, plus it really can't work unless every choice you make for the 'reader' makes sense to them and feels right in their heads, as you try and guess what they think and feel. It's just.. garbage, frankly.

Thank you for your feedback.

I quite liked it, the POV is dangerous but very hot

keep writing !!