All Comments on 'Patricks Marriage Changes Ch. 08'

You are starting to un-wimp Patrick.

Now the story might be worth reading to the end.

Shame it takes so long for each chapter to appear.

tired of serial bullshit that doesn't really warrant the form.

This is normally not the type of story I would read, however I'm enjoying this very much.. you've got my interest to the end....

The last paragraph is an apt metaphor for the entire, and increasingly drawn out, story: sloppy and poorly constructed. It's filled with sentence fragments, and the word is "sole." When mistakes of this level appear in the first and last paragraphs, they stick out, partially because they should be the easiest to catch.

BTW, was anyone surprised that he has a vasectomy? After all the talk of his seed, the only surprise would have been if he hadn't had one.

Two well written chapters to start your longwinded story, then 6 chapters of erotic science fiction garbage. She goes from loving wive to bisexual slut and he becomes a drugged ,sex addict. Incidentally, at some time in the past didn't they have kids or do either one of them care at this point. What a revolting change in your story line from chapters 01 and 02. the Ct Yankee

If she can read his mind, why hasn't she realized he had a vasectomy?

Now he has two problems Bob and Sanya he is falling in love with her and Ann look out .

Atlanta,Ga