by Frankenstein1962
I thought it was a great idea. I am always surprised there are not more peeping stories and videos like this.
But the sex -- even though it was plentiful -- was generally not erotic.
Not enough dialog about what either wants from the other, whether it should be faster, slower, harder, etc. Nothing really about how his cock felt in her hand, her mouth, her pussy or her ass. Nothing about how her breasts felt, tasted, etc. What were the nipples like? Did she like them licked or sucked better? Did she want harder or softer tweaking, sucking, etc.
Could have been much better.
Sounds like they want to tell you how to write YOUR story, if they are so great should write there own story and leave there name and not be using the Anon name. And if the story was as bad as they say why did it rate so high? Anon is a jerk
I really like the first two thirds, the organized voyeur shows was a great idea, but the last third didn't interest me much. It was a nice twist but I wasn't invested in the characters enough to care that much. Thanks!