All Comments on 'Pendulum'

Looking for justice and getting taken against her own will this story sucks big time

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When she saw her sister it she should have broken her spell and arrested everyone including her boss and the judge as well as the piano teacher. This story is truly pathetic

I'm sorry but i liked the story up until they put her under too. That was disappointing i agree with the other person that she should have came out form under when she saw her sister instead of being taken against her will also. That was a waste of my time.

The progression and change between Phoebe and her mind-controlled state seems rather rushed and sudden. Instead of progressing smoothly and, perhaps, more realistically, Phoebe is instead changed with a mention of two days. Unfortunately, this pushes the readers ability to believe what is happening. A slower change, and perhaps, more drawn out scene might fix this, and in the long run, make the final sex scene more drawn out and sensual due to the in-depth knowledge on the mind-control process. Not to mention the reader is given the added benefit on understanding just what is running inside of Phoebe's mind, which is one of the major turn-on's for a mind-control reader.

I do agree it was a bit rushed at the end, but I love the way she got hypnotized along with her sister

First off, fun 5 star effort.

However. The rich taking advantage of people is too much like real life.

The boss being so involved was an interesting surprise. But in hindsight shouldn't have been.

The snapping put out of it and arresting everyone is ridiculous. Clearly she would have to put a round in each of their heads. They are too well connected.