by TattooGeno26
that this was a multipart story. Many readers wait for subsequent parts before reading because so many authors do not finish. So, you now will be graded by people who are irritated that you did not tell them in advance.
ba ba ba ba ba ! I gave you a 5!!!
You keep changing names so I started skimming and then just went to the end 1* for not editing properly.!
It sounds to me like all of this is one story. The fact that two different women's names are being used is confusing. Also, the grammar needs a lot of work.