by Isabelle Jacqueline
Really pulls the reader in. Your use of language was fantastic. I can't wait to read more submissions of yours.
You really pulled me in with the way you mixed the scense. It was very erotic, sensual, enticing. And though it ended sadly, it was yet provocative.
You pulled it off very nicely. Telling parallel stories, interweaving, and tying them together was neat.
Unique writing style from a writer that knows how to think as well as put her thoughts on paper. Very nicely done. I hope that you will continue to submit your stories. Thanks.