All Comments on 'Pirate Treasure Ch. 05'

You definitely have a great handle on the submissiveness of your character. But her actions seem a bit too cliche'. I'm guessing this is what you're going for. It's good, because your appealing to a wide variation of readers - many like this perfectness and predictability of a sub.

You've done a fine job.

Still rolling along with this, enjoying it but the exhibitionism is a bit too much.