by Wattyjoy
This would be so much better if the author worked on comma usage. Poor comma placement kind of throws this entire experience off.
the story is ok, but I found it kind of mediocre and the comma problems threw off the whole thing
This is a very fine story with very powerful mind pictures. The writer is gifted, and with encouragement, can be expected to delight us in the future. I found myself not wanting the story to end. It is so sexy and true to what actually happened on the plantations, where animal vetinarians attended births for Black women, and workers were dipped in same manner as sheep,
Commas are something the proofreaders fix up in the final draft before publishing - of no consequence here.
felt like it was stalling all the time because of unnecessary commas. work on it
Could be a better story. Needs more descriptive writing, more imagination.
Very good. I'd like to read a story about a Plantation Master who sucks the slaves and lets them fuck his white ass.