All Comments on 'Play Date Ch. 02'

The story carries on well from the first part; the characters and the conversations are realistic. My only suggestion would be a more careful and critical proofreading. There are several spots where words have been omitted or the wrong word used. Even in erotica standards should be maintained!

This was so well written and evocative that i didn't notice the few grammatical or syntax errors that the previous reviewer referred to - and I am a professional editor!!! It was hot. Can't we have a sequel in which she gets to play with the guy - who is the only one of the foursome not to get his rocks off.