All Comments on 'Please Let Me Serve You Pt. 03'

I think my absolute favourite scene is in the next chapter. Ah yes, the beautiful sight of the Husqvarna S1600 23" Composite Splitting Axe buried so deep into Emily's head that the orange shaft is touching her skull. Wonderfully written that scene and such a fitting end for Emily.

Premise still good.

But the sex, when it finally happens -- when he eats her out -- is too fast. Why the rush? Only one short paragraph.

Since he admits he's neither an experienced not a good pussy eater, why not have her tell him what to do. Step by step. With her reactions to what he does, positive or with further instructions. And with dialog during it where she asks him if he likes her pussy. Looks? Smell? Taste?

Four stars again.

very good. And from "pretty early..." to "...trust her", one of the best things I have ever read on this subject. Don't mind the trolls, just keep writing. Bravo!